Dude really ruins everything he touches uh. Including young girls. That you can get so filthy rich not being able to do anything right is a testament to how backwards our society is.
I’d change the punchline to “Including young girls’ *childhood”. Although I agree that is a bit cumbersome, still. Might need a larger refactor if we want to preserve the specific wording that Donald Trump touches young girls.
Not calling you out, but highlighting diction. In any case, the original sends the impression that sexual assault diminishes the victim in some capacity, which is not a very prosocial spin.
Don’t let anyone tell you being a comedian is easy.
Don’t let anyone tell you being a comedian is easy.
my dude, i’ve spent many, many hours workshopping and rubber ducking jokes with comedians far better than me. it’s why i keep reusing the same jokes, like any good shit comedian i stole half of them. but i’ve never seen anyone say “hey, your joke needs some more work” to someone they didn’t know better than you did here and i just wanted to give you a little verbal hug.
Thanks! Honestly, I spent about 10 minutes writing that previous comment because I wanted to avoid being unnecessarily aggravating.
I’m so anxious about communicating clearly that I’ve planned and workshopped giving suggestions myself. And I’ve found the best way is to put yourself on their side so that your advice feels like you’re both going in the same direction. As opposed to butting heads or stonewalling the person you want to help. And that means actually understanding what someone is trying to do (because, if you don’t, you just sound arrogant and misguided when giving advice about something they don’t want).
I didn’t do that there because the intent of the joke was likely what it appeared to be
Dude really ruins everything he touches uh. Including young girls. That you can get so filthy rich not being able to do anything right is a testament to how backwards our society is.
I’d change the punchline to “Including young girls’ *childhood”. Although I agree that is a bit cumbersome, still. Might need a larger refactor if we want to preserve the specific wording that Donald Trump touches young girls.
Not calling you out, but highlighting diction. In any case, the original sends the impression that sexual assault diminishes the victim in some capacity, which is not a very prosocial spin.
Don’t let anyone tell you being a comedian is easy.
my dude, i’ve spent many, many hours workshopping and rubber ducking jokes with comedians far better than me. it’s why i keep reusing the same jokes, like any good shit comedian i stole half of them. but i’ve never seen anyone say “hey, your joke needs some more work” to someone they didn’t know better than you did here and i just wanted to give you a little verbal hug.
Thanks! Honestly, I spent about 10 minutes writing that previous comment because I wanted to avoid being unnecessarily aggravating.
I’m so anxious about communicating clearly that I’ve planned and workshopped giving suggestions myself. And I’ve found the best way is to put yourself on their side so that your advice feels like you’re both going in the same direction. As opposed to butting heads or stonewalling the person you want to help. And that means actually understanding what someone is trying to do (because, if you don’t, you just sound arrogant and misguided when giving advice about something they don’t want).
I didn’t do that there because the intent of the joke was likely what it appeared to beI get it, good point.
He’s a “white male,” and he benefits from “failing up.” It’s ridiculous.
its fred trumps fault, if he hadnt let him inherit his money, he would be probably a scummy used car salesman.