An original story, in progress.

  • RampantParanoia2365@lemmy.worldOP
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    1 month ago

    Go back and reread when she enters the half dark kitchen and walks to the fridge, by the island. It’s not just texture and character building. I’m curious how clear it is, because there’s a reason I keep mentioning directions and placement.

    And I’ve added a scene setup to the opening, which should immediately identify the Doctor pretty well. I’ve also tweaked some of his rambling.